Is this poem all squared away?

Oh Monolith, Oh Monolith,
I bow to you and pray.
Your shiny, slick, exterior
Puts on a fine display.
Your angles feel so right to me,
Your measurements, so true
You must be something special
Cause there's no one else like you!
How nice you'd look tipped over
Outside my humble cave
A patio on which I'd stand
And to my neighbors wave.

PLEASE HELP 3. Compare and contrast William Shakespeare's "Sonnet 116" and Edna St. Vincent Millay's "Love is not all."?

3. How are the two poems similar? How are they different? Use specific examples from the works to support your answer.

Its both. To some it is cliche.
To others its deep.
The stars hyperbole is overused, some would say.
It is highly dependent on your intended audience.

Your poem does have some lovely moments.. The beauty of your deep eyes is a lovely line.

I dont like the repeated use of Is as a starting word. You could be more creative there.

Of course, this is just my humble opinion. I am not qualified to say what is or is not right. I think writing is a great skill and hobby so I hope you dont take offense. My intention is not in any way to put you off writing, quite the opposite.

Feel free to rip my poem, in my questions, apart.

Peace

I stopped off at the station
met the whole population
want to tell you the score
and there's so much more

Am so glad I can to YAP
but I gotta hurry and go pee
So da score at half is
Folks this is all showbiz

#24 TCU (alma mater) 24
#4 Oklahoma ,,,,,,,,,,,24

Second half coming up. Is on Fox.

Thomas