It does tell a good story when the reader takes the time to read.
You need capital "I' and maybe capitals every other line.
Also break it up.Many use fancy tricks to make it seem better.

I can remember everything.............
just the way it was........................
Our life together our home, our rings
when I close my eyes and I can see.

Every step along the way..............
that it takes to get me back to you
I'm running down the streets.........
that are in my head.....................

Writing this poem for a friend who's boyfriend always puts her down (about her looks mostly) and praises others but claims to love and notice only her. I took inspiration from Shane Koyczan and started off with "You crept into my life with your tongue like a knife stabbing your words into my skin". Now I want to say something along the lines of: in contrast for 'them' he used the 'opposite of a knife', 'healed' their 'scars' and made their 'skin' thicker, "is that what you call love?" But I don't know how to say it cause I suck at this stuff. It would mean a lot if you would help, thanks x

like i can't trust anyone but me in this place

if you are going to get serious about writing, I suggest you use words that you can be proud of.
that you make some sense and not contradict yourself throughout the poem or song...
if you believe in yourself then you shouldn't be so harsh.
keep writing please, but lose the profanity, so everyone can really take you on your words..
K

motion determines the type
continental drift, slipping
across the seafloor
spreading
moving sideways
without diametric change
convergent, transform
Earthquakes divergent,
volcanic activity, building mountains
and oceanic trench;
Marianas formation along that plate
with boundaries

this is a sample only not so much a complete poem, but you get my drift.