I want to write a poem in the style of 'The Raven' by Edgar Allan Poe, but I need help. Can you help me?

I want to start it off like, 'Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary' but I don't want to copy it, I want it to be my own. How can I reword it to make it my own?

What Is It?

The fuse is lit
but made of water
it rises, a mist
and starts it's slaughter...

...fearing hate, eschewing love
it's hell is in the Heaven's above
But still it breeds
a silent slither
calls young, weak minds
come, come hither.

The media calls it a pagan queen
but it is less historic, and more obscene.

does this sound good? A beautiful girl lights the world with her smile. She makes the world heaven on earth, when she frowns the world goes dark and becomes lifeless. This beautiful girl's eyes sparkle and when there's a starry night she is all you think about. When you hear the word love, all you can think about is her. This girl is amazing her smile turns your bad day into a good day. Her gorgeous laugh puts your mind at ease. When you hold this girl close you feel immortal to life itself, you feel protected because you know this girls love would never fail you. When you go to sleep at night she is the last thing you think about, and when you wake up she is the first. She is all you can dream about, and when you see this girl hurt you can't stand it, it hurts you. This girl is love and if you have her she will never fail you neither would her love. Everything she does is beautiful, everything she does is right!
By Derek Riordan

America cares not about the Blacks There, did it, will show you the unstressed/STRESSED

a-MER-i-CA cares NOT a-BOUT the BLACKS (5 metric feet, 10 syllables)

Nailed it.

If it has to be the exact words you have it won't work because you have more
than 10 syllables, which is the limit on Iambic Pentameter.

"Rise in the heart, and gather to the eyes." doesn't have any poetic devices.

"Bond, James Bond" is a parallelism, which is the repetition of syntactical similarities in passages closely connected for rhetorical effect. The repetitive structure, which is commonly used in elevated prose as well as poetry, lends wit or emphasis to the meanings of the separate clauses, thus being particularly effective in antithesis.

Each line? The speaker contrasts her physical heart (brown, small) with the emotional heart (which has a different kind of weight and is usually pictured as red. She imagined her heart being physically removed but then talks about its metaphorical journeys in her body. Sometimes her heart is in her throat. Sometimes she has a "heavy heart" ("heaviest alloy"). Sometimes it would make her cry (lovesickness?) Now she is aware of her heart _per se_ whereas before she wasn't. Then it kept beating (pounding our Morse code). The speaker imagines that her heart has a consciousness, even to the extent of wondering if the person in whose body it is working was really present at all to think of it (esse est percipi).

Poem is written in a rhythm that closely resembles a heartbeat.